Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?
Plenty of
tasks
and poor time
management are the reason the majority of people
are unable to balance
their work and other activities
. To solve this
, communicate with their manager or hire a new assistant.
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time
many people
often feel difficult to finish immense duties, causing them to feel confused. Putting more simply when people
are incapable to reject or avoid huge tasks
from their manager, it leads to more and more assignment
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assignments
This
is because they are unconfident and afraid to tell the problems they have such
as plenty of duties to a higher manager. Furthermore
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time
,
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leads to lessening Correct word choice
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while
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people
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people
are working on Fridays at state companies, they often receive many documents twice more than other
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As a result
, they are unable to balance
other activities
such
as having fun with family or simply doing exercise.
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, to solve this problems
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these problems
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and leading
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. This
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duty
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tasks
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tasks
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Consequently
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people
have more times to enjoy their lives.
In conclusion, many people
are unable to finish all tasks
, so they are unable to manage their work and the plans which
they have. To Correct pronoun usage
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solves
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such
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people
might combine these solutions to have a work-life balance
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