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1)Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#advertisements #life #development
These days, advertisements are normal for businesses,
products
 and brands as well.
Although
 many organizations have an expensive cost contributing to advert expenditure, they get much more profit
due to
 a higher
customer's
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 demand. In my personal perspective, companies obtain positive development from advertising ,and I will give more details in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached. First of all, it is undeniable that advertisements play a significant role in brand awareness. The companies have to let the market well-know their
products
 , servicing ,or managing organization.
For example
, CP corporation launched an optimistic advertisement on children's day committed to their responsibility to the young generation in society can let people know more about the
company
, even though have
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non product
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 in that.
As a result
, the companies are easier accessed by advertising.
Moreover
, advertising enhances a more demand for
products
 by bringing many types of
advertisement
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advertisements
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 to clients via
TV
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channel
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, banners on websites and radio as well.
For instance
, when consumers watch adverted
products
, they like to order or buy
this
 brand was remembered
then
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 rise sell volume of these
products
.
Thus
, a new product is able to escalate trade value by shouting an advertisement.
Therefore
, If a
company
 have to enhance their merchandise profit, advertising could be a good way to support its business. In conclusion, easier reaching the consumers relied on advertisements, not only for
company
 awareness but
also
 to increase market share and
company
 profit.
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