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Band 4.5

1)Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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These days, advertisements are normal for businesses,
products
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 and brands as well.
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 many organizations have an expensive cost contributing to advert expenditure, they get much more profit
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 a higher
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 demand. In my personal perspective, companies obtain positive development from advertising ,and I will give more details in the following paragraphs before the conclusion is reached. First of all, it is undeniable that advertisements play a significant role in brand awareness. The companies have to let the market well-know their
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 , servicing ,or managing organization.
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, CP corporation launched an optimistic advertisement on children's day committed to their responsibility to the young generation in society can let people know more about the
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, even though have
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non product
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 in that.
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, the companies are easier accessed by advertising.
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, advertising enhances a more demand for
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 by bringing many types of
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 to clients via
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channel
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, banners on websites and radio as well.
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, when consumers watch adverted
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, they like to order or buy
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 brand was remembered
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 rise sell volume of these
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.
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, a new product is able to escalate trade value by shouting an advertisement.
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, If a
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 have to enhance their merchandise profit, advertising could be a good way to support its business. In conclusion, easier reaching the consumers relied on advertisements, not only for
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 awareness but
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 to increase market share and
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 profit.
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