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You lost an item while traveling on a bus. An employee of the bus company assisted you in recovering your lost item. Write a letter to the company manager to thank the employee. In your letter describe what you lost and why it was important to you how the employee helped you find it and explain how you felt after recovering it.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to you to appreciate and thank your employee for your support in finding my valuable item. A Few days ago I
traveled
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travelled
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 from Victoria to Vancouver on your bus 7489bst for my beloved brother during the journey I slept and some children took the gift and put it somewhere in the transport the gift was 80 grams of gold it cost 15000 dollars which I was purchased in Malaysia. One of your staff members named Ave took that gift from there and safely hand over to the higher authority lost and found the section in
transport
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 office. when I was filing the report it was so easy to claim and recover my item because she had given the travel information of every passenger. After I received the jewelry I flew above the moon during that time. Once again thanks for your service and support. yours sincerely, Stany

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Include more details about how you felt during the experience and after recovering the item to enhance emotional connection.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas more clearly into dedicated paragraphs for better organization. Each paragraph should ideally cover a single main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use simpler sentences or break down complex ideas to improve clarity in your writing.
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You expressed gratitude clearly and effectively, which is important in a thank-you letter.
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The letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for the context.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • appreciation
  • grateful
  • recovery
  • significance
  • assistance
  • employee
  • commendation
  • issue
  • valuable possession
  • lost and found
  • emotional impact
  • trustworthy
  • committed
  • efforts
  • sincere thank you
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