The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
The line graph illustrates the
temperature
in three
cities
on a monthly average,
while
the table gives information about how many
sunshine
hours annually in those different
cities
.
Overall
, the monthly
temperature
trend
in
London
and New
York
has similar directions,
whereas
the
temperature
trend
in
Sydney
is
in contrast
.
Although
London
and New
York
have almost the same way of monthly
temperature
trends, the average amount of
sunshine
per
year
is not the same. The average monthly climate in
London
and New
York
is an upward
trend
from the beginning of the
year
to around July, which peak at around 23 and nearly 30, respectively. After that, the temperatures in both
cities
decrease gradually until they reach the low
temperature
in December at just under 10 in
London
and exactly 5 in New
York
.
However
, the weather in
Sydney
contrasts with those
cities
, starting at just above 25 and
then
slightly declining to around 16 in July, which is the lowest-
temperature
month in
Sydney
, and ,
afterwards
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the
trend
is rise
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slowly back to 25 in December In terms of
sunshine
hours per
year
,
London
is the city with the least
sunshine
, about 1,180 per
year
.
Although
the climate
trend
is similar to New
York
, the average number of sunlight annually differs as much by 1,355. With
Sydney
, there is not much difference in the
sunshine
in the
year
compared to New
York
, which accounts for 2,473 and 2,535 in
Sydney
and New
York
, respectively.
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