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People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect on this outweigh the negative effects?

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Nowadays, many
people
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 are environed by
commercials
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 every day which can BE across on billboards, stores and on the Internet.
Due to
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ads
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,
people
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 can buy modern and advanced things which make their
life
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 better and easier.
However
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, sometimes they spend money without thinking under the influence of adverts. The merits and demerits of both types of
advertisement
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 will be discussed in
this
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 essay. Beginning with the positive aspects,
ads
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makes
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make
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people
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’s
life
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 more comfortable because
people
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 can know about the latest and better versions of some
products
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, so they purchase them to facilitate themselves and their family.
Moreover
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,
advertisement
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 companies in every
filed
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field
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 of
life
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 provide
people
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 with useful information,
for
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instance
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 medical procedures, objects and instruments
people
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 keep improving their lifestyle
with
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by
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 buying these
products
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.
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,
advertisement
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 improves
economy
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the economy
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 of
country
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the country
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 too, when
people
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 demand the
products
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 and
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 supply them.
Therefore
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,
advertisement
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 has certain benefits for
people
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. But
commercials
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also
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 have some major disadvantages like unchecked
ads
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, sometimes
people
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 are triggered by advertisements
purchase
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to purchase
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products
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 without
its
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their
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 need.
Therefore
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,
ads
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 should be filtered by organizations or
government
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the government
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, because in our country many
commercials
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 that harm
to
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apply
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people
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’s health are allowed. As an example, bloggers from Instagram promote the financial pyramids
and
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 has a negative impact on
people
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 because they can lose their money.
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, bets are very popular on the internet, and
this
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 attracts
attention
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the attention
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 of many
people
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.
For instance
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, 1xbet is a popular and known
advertisement
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 because it is everywhere and everyone
see
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 it. In conclusion,
people
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 see
ads
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 everywhere because they live in a world where it has become a necessary part of
life
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.
Commercials
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affects
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affect
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people
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 positively and negatively depending on
advertised
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the advertised
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 product. Despite
this
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, I consider that
commercials
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 are beneficial for society.

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