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speech about your life in Ukraine as medical student

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Good evening everyone! My name is Windana DEKPAHOMA aka Justin Adrenalinovich, I am from Togo and actually am a Medical doctor at Lome Campus Hospital. Speaking from Accra, Ghana. I'm here as a graduate of
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 to talk about my experience as a medical student in
Ukraine
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 at Vinnitsya. I spent 6 years studying medicine at
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 and obtained a Diploma of Doctor of Medicine
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 a lot of knowledge and insight into the
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 healthcare system. I studied in
Ukrainian
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language
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 medium with national and foreign students as group mates. I spent my first 6 months in
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 at
VNMU
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language
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 preparatory faculty learning the
Ukrainian
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language
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. It was difficult but enjoyable, the
language
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 help me to appreciate
Ukraine
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's culture and lifestyle. I was
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 a member of
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's international committee and took part in student conferences and
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 activities
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 as the "Я люблю медицину", the "Surgery show", and the "Фармашоу".  Apart from my studies, I was actively involved in volunteer work with the "
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 Family Foundation" NGO. We organized international and kids' culture camps that enabled me to explore different cultures and interact with people from different countries. During my time in
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, I
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 travelled to cities across the country to immerse myself in its culture, speaking with locals so I could speak more proficiently their
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.
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, During my time in
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, I
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 fell in love with a fellow medical student and decided to ask her to marry me on our graduation day, 26th June 2021. Today, we are happily married with a son. I was supposed to come back to
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 to continue my Residenship in Surgery in august 2022 but the war in
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 changed everything as it's difficult now to get a visa to travel to
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.
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, life wasn't like roses in
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. I faced some problems with some
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,
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, some
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 automatically give
foreigners
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 lower marks simply because they believe that a foreigner can get a higher mark than national students. Some even use to tell us straight that you are
foreigners
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 and we can't give you a good mark.
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 sometimes after doing group work with
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 students
foreigners
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 use to get lower marks just because they are
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.
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 some
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 were there to support our effort and encourage us.
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, I would like to thank our
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 for everything they've done for us.
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 a big thanks to
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 for everything - for the beautiful memories, for the lessons, and most of all, for giving me a wife and family.  An outstanding thank to ЗСУ for protecting
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 against the immoral war that the
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 army started 366 days ago. I will keep praying for
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 war to finish ASAP with
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 regaining its territorial integrity as recognized by the UN. Thank you. Слава ЗСУ! Слава Україні!

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