Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about it?

There is a saying that how we live, work and maintain our surroundings, reflects our image
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others. With that
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I firmly believe that it is crucial to keep our
house
and our workplace neat and clean, as it not only puts a good impression on others about us
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but is
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beneficial for us in many ways. First and foremost, no one likes a dirty co-worker who is messy and not tidy in the office. It makes them somewhat uncomfortable and hesitant to come to your station to help or have a conversation.
On the other
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it is
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a headache to find small stuff or even an essential document
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when we are in
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real need of it. If we manage to keep a tidy work-station , it gives us a good feeling, less stress and makes us feel confident. Now when we change
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. Our neighbours, relatives or even friends will feel reluctant to come to our
house
if they find that we are untidy. Having a clean and orderly
house
reduces the chance of bacteria and other harmful things
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in a dirty environment, which will affect our health. Once again it is helpful to find stuff
such
as socks, ties or even a TV remote, if we have things clean and organised at home. Sometimes it is so annoying to look for small things like a pen at home or
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when you need to sign a parcel or a document. Feels like our whole world is upside down
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time of need.
To conclude
, I believe that to make our life simple and less stressful we should all start
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cleaning and organising both our
house
and workplace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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