Experts claim that if older people do more exercise they will be healthier and happier. However, many elderly people suffer from a lack of fitness. What are the causes of this and what are some possible solutions?

Experts affirm that if elderly citizens do more frequent some
type
of
exercise
they will feel in
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conditions and happier.
However
, many of these
people
suffer from
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poor health. Some of the causes are that they feel scared to do
exercise
and they have no energy to start doing any
type
of physical activity and
some
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of the possible solutions are visiting a physical therapist and
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passive
acitvities
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activities
to keep in great health. One of the causes of elderly
people
refuse
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to
do
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exercise
is that most of them feel scared to fall down, so they try to not
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anything to feel safe.
Fisrtly
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Firstly
, many mature
people
suffer from fractures
due to
falls because they lose the ability
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reflexes.
Secondly
, most of them have no energy to
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doing
exercise
because
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most of the
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are
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down or lying down, so they start feeling tired and weak.
For instance
, the University of Fullerton made
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research in 1995 that states those elderly
people
who stayed more than four hours sitting down,
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start losing muscle and
they
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might suffer from falls more frequently. One of the solutions is that these mature citizens should visit a physical therapist to be
asssisted
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assisted
and perform some
type
of physical
activities
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.
Moreover
, most of these
people
who are attended by a professional are taught to do the right
exercise
and they learned how to move. Another solution is that
people
who
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exercise
feel more energetic and increase their chances to keep in great health. By doing passive movements many of them might lower the
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of not suffering from chronic diseases like Diabetes
type
II and arthritis. To explain
further
, the university of Los Angeles made a study that states that mature
society
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that
keep
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active and
perform
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daily physical activities have more chances to keep healthier and they might lower the chances of suffering from
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chronic
disease
due to
keeping passive movements
such
as swimming.
To conclude
, elderly
people
who want to keep healthier need to do some
type
of physical activity as
wel
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well
as
being
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attended by a professional to learn how to do these physical activities;
however
, many of them are scared of falling down and they tend to suffer from low energy and tiredness. If these issues are not addressed properly they might end
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up
of
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losing their
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eventually.
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