The world of work is changing rapidly. Working condition today are not the same as before and people no longer rely on taking one job for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions for how people should prepare for work in the future

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The phenomenon of young
folks
often changing their jobs has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
issue in question may be, I personally
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believe
that regularly
change
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to a new working environment is more appropriate for
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modern society. Regarding the old living pattern,
people
prefer to stick with one
job
until retirement for several reasons. Probably the most common reason is that most companies offer a tempting contract in order to
remain
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their intelligent
staffs
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willing to stay in the organization.
For instance
, those contracts usually have a statement about
a
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huge money that will
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belong to the employees as long as they work in the company for a decade or more. If you resign
it
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, you may have nothing.
Therefore
, it is essential that find a dream
job
as their whole working life.
However
,
this
kind of contract
is almost vanishes
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on
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the
job
market.
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,
people
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to notice
about
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their body health and family relationship.
Hence
, work-life
balence
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balance
is become
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the most popular living style among young
people
.
For example
, most older
folks
have a lot of physical
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and bad
marriage
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because they spent too much time on work, which in turn get more attention from their superiors in exchange
they
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can continue
stay
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in the company.
By contrast
, current
people
would like to change to a new
job
to find a more suitable
job
for themselves. Since
,
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they do not trick
by
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the companies' contract again and give up their health and family. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that the values between older
folks
and young
folks
have a contrary difference and the changing in the work market. So,
people
prefer to take various jobs.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • automation
  • gig economy
  • freelance work
  • dynamic job market
  • work-life balance
  • career satisfaction
  • job security
  • technological advancements
  • globalization
  • skill update
  • flexible working conditions
  • job paths
  • educational systems
  • career changes
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