the graphs show basic information about employment

the graphs show basic information about employment
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The following graph indicates data about
employment
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rates of the two genders in six different countries between 1995 and 2005.
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in Australia, Iceland and New Zealand male hiring differs considerably from
females
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female
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in both years.
According to
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the bar ,
chart
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the chart
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we can see that the highest male
employment
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number is in Iceland and it is around seventy per
cent
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. ,
However
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in ,2005 it rose to over eighty per
cent
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.
Also
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if we look at women's recruitment in the year 2005 we are able to find that it was above forty per
cent
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and after another ten ,years it didn't change a lot only to ten per
cent
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.
While
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in the USA the situation was completely different.
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, back in 1995 female
employment
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was near to forty per
cent
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and
it is clear that
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now it rose to sixty per
cent
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.
On the other
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hand
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male community experienced only half of the growth of females, by 10% from 60 to 70%. In conclusion,
although
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men's
employment
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was higher than women's, it didn't face
such
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a rise as females.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, cent with synonyms.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment sectors
  • economic cycles
  • recessions
  • booms
  • demographic groups
  • qualifications
  • employability
  • globalization
  • outsourcing
  • multilingual
  • remote work
  • freelance
  • technological advancements
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