some people feel that boarding schools are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides and reach a conclusion

In recent times boarding
schools
are becoming popular among
parents
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However
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also
been
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debated
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a lot by
parents
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the boarding
schools
are
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advantageous
for children or
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more problems than
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benefits
. Here are some reasons that might help to get to a conclusion. Some people go with boarding
schools
because they think their child will be
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disciplined
, will learn to make decisions on their own, and will be better exposed to the world. For
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, a parent who are not able to give time towards the development of their kid
due to
tight work schedules
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the ones who are
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benefited
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these kind
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of
schools
.
On the other
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many people don't support the idea of boarding
schools
because they
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believe
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believe
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that keeping children away
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their
parents
is having plenty of negative effects rather than
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benefits
.
This
can be better explained with an example of a kid who is in Gurukul Boarding School suffering
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homesickness, bullying and mental instability. We cannot conclude
wether
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boarding
schools
are a good option or not. Because it has
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own
possitive
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positive
and negative effects on a child. It totally depends on the mental strength of the kid and the situation of the
parents
or guardian to decide
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