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the chart below show the value of one country's exports in various catagories

the chart below show the value of one country's exports in various catagories
#show #value #country #exports #catagories
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The chart illustrates the volume of
country's
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the country's
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 exports in different product types from 2015 to 2016 and the units were measured in billions. The table displays changing
proportion
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proportions
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 in each product
categories
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category
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 between 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, the tendency in every category of export experienced an upward trend over the period of time except in gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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.
However
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, petroleum goods
are
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accounted for the highest in
this
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 country. Regarding
to
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the chart, petroleum is the most
exports
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exported
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, it was nearly 60
billion
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 and gradually increased
3
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by 3
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% to
approximate
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approximately
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 63
billion
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 in 2016.
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, even though textiles have the least amount in both years,
but
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apply
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they have changed the most, around 26
billion
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 in 2015 and sharply rose 15.24% to almost 31
billion
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 in 2016.
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, Agricultural exports
was
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were
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 around 31
billion
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 in 2015 and steadily went up 0.18% in 2016.
Moreover
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, gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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 were the only goods which experienced a downward trend, it
nearly
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was nearly
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 43
billion
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 in 2015 and dropped 5.18% to approximately 41
billion
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 in 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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