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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many people feel that
music
 can play a major role in minimizing stress levels.I completely agree with
this
 statement .
Firstly
,
music
 is composed in
such
 a way that lyrics are relatable to people's life and tunes are made really soothing which can rejuvenate the body cells and a person can effectively work on the
music
melody
 .
For instance
 ,In the USA research was done on a woman who was in a coma for 5 years .
Music
 therapy was done to her as a treatment as soon as she was treated with the
melody
 of
music
 she responded well.
Furthermore
 , in some papers and past publications, it can be found that not only animals but plants
also
 benefitted from it.
Secondly
,it helps us to bring out a person from mental trauma .Nowadays mental problem has become the greatest issue which most folks are facing .To illustrate,one friend used to suffer from anxiety and got panic most of the time and whenever she feels so she sings her heart out and listen to soothing tones which actually helped her to put away stress .Not only her many individuals do
this
 to overcome their fear.
Moreover
, the current generation is more into
music
 and is choosing
music
 as a basic part of life too.Many thought of making
music
 as their career
In addition
 to that most schools and colleges are providing
music
 classes to students who are interested in
music
 . In conclusion ,tunes are like medication to the body ,every person can implement
melody
 for mental exercise .
However
, the choice of
melody
 may vary
according to
 one's personality.
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