You will move to a new city for work. You know some people who live there. write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - Ask them for help finding accommodation - Tell them where you would like to live - Tell them the type of place you are looking for

Dear Mr. Smith, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

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letter to let you know that I will be moving to Toronto soon which is very new to me.

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, I need your help to find accommodation over there. I know a few people who have lived there for 5 years they know the place very well.

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, I am looking for a place which is near the office building and will be convenient for me to reach the office.

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, I was looking at some apartments on the website which seem to be very legit and have enough space for me. They don't have laundry in the unit but it is in the building which is in the basement and I don't have any issue with it.

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, my concern is I need a place which has at least Three rooms so I can share with some other individuals by

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I am able to save some money for my family's help. Thank You, Yours Faithfully, Syed Khawar Ali

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task achievement

Make sure to clearly state what kind of accommodation you want at the beginning.

coherence and cohesion

Try to organize your ideas better by separating each thought into its own paragraph.

coherence and cohesion

Use simple sentences to make your ideas clearer and easier to follow.

greeting and closing

You have a polite greeting and closing.

complete response

You explained your needs for accommodation well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

173 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Organized tour to remote areas and community is increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for the local people and the environment?

A “cashless society” is one where people use debit/credit cards and other forms of payment. Do the advantages of a cashless society outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person's nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion