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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart describes the percentages of the gross domestic product generated from two different components (IT and
service
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industry
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) in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Generally, the manufacturing of
GDP
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 increased in both IT and
service
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 industries, but IT remained higher throughout
this
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 period. At the beginning of the period, in 1992, the IT
industry
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 produced slightly over 6
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percent
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per cent
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 of
GDP
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, which exceeded more than 2
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percent
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per cent
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 of the
service
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industry
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. Over the following four years, until 1996, the levels became more similar, with both components standing between 6 and just over 8
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percent
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per cent
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. IT
industry
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 remained higher
overall
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,
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 it dropped marginally just below 8
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 in 1996.
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, the production rates from the two components were significantly different during the periods around 1998 and 2000. The percentage of the
GDP
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 from the IT
industry
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 increased quite sharply to 12% in 1998 and considerably over 16% in 2000,
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 the
service
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industry
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 remained the same, increasing to slightly over 8%.
At the end
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 of the period, the
GDP
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manufacturing
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of manufacturing
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 in the IT
industry
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 was almost twice that of the
service
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industry
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry, gdp, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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