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Some people believe that there should be a fixed punishment for each type of crime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this ?

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Nowadays, the crime rate drastically increasing in different modes, typically
people
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 personalising
opinion
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the opinion
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 that every offence should be punished
with
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according
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 their cruelty. The Investigating officers had done
research
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, across the world after 20 th century
people
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 were killing for
own
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their own
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 needs. There are some advantage and
disadvantges
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disadvantages
disadvantage
will
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that will
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 be followed if government take public
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to advise
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advise
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. Doing an offence depends on
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the mentally
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mentally
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mental
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 of
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the persons
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persons
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person
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, some are forcefully pressurised to do
for example
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, recently incident
taken
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took
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 place in
the
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apply
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Hyderabad to kill a young
cherish
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 man who was in
relationship
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a relationship
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 with
political
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a political
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 man's daughter.
Due to
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politicians
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politicians'
politician's
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 support
person
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people
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 who done murder didn't even
punished
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punish
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. Because
,
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apply
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case
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the case
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 was taken
bit
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a bit
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delay
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delayed
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 and
finally
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 closed the chapter. For those individuals administration should take an action within 2 days of
incident
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the incident
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 if
police
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the police
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knows
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know
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 the killer
that is
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 by hanging without delaying
case
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the case
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 in court.
Then
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 it will be
quite
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aquite
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 relief for
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the victims
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victims
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victims'
victim's
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family
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families
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. On
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the other
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other hand
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another hand
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,
person
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the person
a person
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 who do rape and
murdering
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murdered
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 a girl, there should
have
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apply
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fixed punishment taken place in
North
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the North
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korea
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Korea
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 government which was similar to
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the Nazi
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 system.
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, if these rules came into
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the picture
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,
then
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rate
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the rate
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 of crimes might be decreased. Sometimes, unintentionally may
happens
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happen
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 like in between relationships
people
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 will fight for property accidentally among one of them might die. In
this
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 case, if
court
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the court
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 put strong action
as
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apply
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similar to
other type
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another type
other types
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 of murders
then
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 it would bring mental issues among the family members. If
people
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doung
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doing
 minor incidents and
punishment
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a punishment
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 rate
less
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fewer
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 means without any seriousness
take
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make
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it
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apply
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as an
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an
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apply
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advantage and chances of doing
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further more
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furthermore
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. In conclusion, if fixed punishment
carried
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is carried
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 out for
particular
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a particular
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 offence
then
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 it could quit
bring
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bringing
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 more
advantage
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advantages
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 than disadvantages.
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, the individuals may learn the lesson and try
decline
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to decline
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there
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their
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 decisions for
next
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the next
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 one.
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