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The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002.

The table below shows consumer spending on different items in 5 countries in 2002.
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The given table illustrates the proportion of natural
expenditure
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 in
Ireland
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, Italy,
Spain
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, Sweden and
Turkey
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 in 3 categories of goods items in 2002.
Overall
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, food/drinks/tobacco were the most preferred types of goods,
whereas
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 leisure/education
were
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 spent the least amount of money by citizens. Another point that should
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 be highlighted is that the
expenditure
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 of
Turkey
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 in total was the highest in comparison to other
countries
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. (The outlay of
Turkey
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 was generally higher
that
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than
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 the other four
countries
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) In terms of food/drinks/tobacco,
Turkey
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 spent the most at 32,14%. The spendings of
Ireland
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 in
this
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 category were
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 high (28,91%) compared to Sweden which spent the least (15,77%). The
expenditure
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 for Italy and
Spain
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 in
this
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 category were almost equal at 16,36% and 18,80% respectively. The second most popular group consist of clothing/footwear where Italy topped the list at just 9% of their national
expenditure
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 as opposed to Sweden, which spent the least at just 5,40%.
Turkey
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,
Ireland
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 and
Spain
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 have practically
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equal percentages at 6,63%, 6,43 and 6,51% respectively. Leisure and education
expenditure
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 accounted for the least preferred in the table and
Turkey
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 of all
thecountries
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the countries
countries
 spent 4,35%, whilst
Spain
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 and
Ireland
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 spent the least amount of money at around 2%. The other two
countries
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 were around 1% higher at 3,20% and 3,22%. (The national spending in
this
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 area for the remaining
countries
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 averaged (усредненный) around 6,5%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, ireland, spain, turkey, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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