The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

The given charts indicate the comparison of
household’s
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expenses
on
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various categories, over six decades between 1950 and 1987.
Overall
, housing and
food
accounted for the largest proportion in 1950 and 2010 respectively.
Additionally
, there was a reduction in the
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of money citizens spent on housing and education,
whereas
food
, health care, transportation and other expenditures experienced an increase over the period in question. In 1950, housing was the primary source of
expenses
, at 72,1%;
however
, its number decreased remarkably by 50,1% to only 22% which was the second highest in the year 2010.
In addition
,
expenses
on education
also
decreased to 6,3%. Meanwhile, during the period of 60 years, the figures for
food
and other expenditures increased considerably to 34% and 19,2% respectively, which made
food
the most spent category in 2010.
Moreover
, transportation witnessed
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significant growth from 3,3% to 14% and became the 4th position in
expenses
.
Additionally
, expenditures on health care practically doubled over the whole period from just 2,4% to 4,5%.
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