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Some Young People are leaving the countryside to live in towns and cities, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

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Some youngsters prefer to live in the
city
 centre more than in the countryside.
In contrast
, the elderly prefer to live in the
city
 side
instead
.
This
 essay will discuss the reason why
this
 issue happened. On the one hand, the reason living in towns is better than the countryside is because there are a lot of facilities that are accessible to
people
,
such
 as working places or schools. Since most youngsters are working and studying, which is the modern lifestyle of today's
people
, everything has to be the fastest way so they can move to do other things.
In contrast
, most old
people
 who prefer to live away from the
city
 are already retired, have no more energy to
active
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 themselves as they were young and want to have a slow life. They might prefer to live in a quiet place, that has no sound pollution and a relaxing environment,
instead
 of a state that has a busy environment.
On the other hand
, the solution to help
this
 problem is the government should provide a good quality education system to the locals and establish policies to expand the industries in the countryside so
people
 will have a job without having to move to find work in the
city
 centre.
To conclude
, Living in the
city
 centres or the
city
 side is depended on the lifestyle of the person who lives. Generation is
also
 one of the factors that influence
people
's living but it is not the main reason that can be decided where they will live.
However
, the states can help
people
 by developing good qualities in many ways for the
city
 side's
people
.
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