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Some people agree with spending lot of money on large wedding while others thinks it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

#people #money #waste
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Marriage is always a beautiful
event
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 to happen in a
person
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's life and it is a one-day
event
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. Some people like to be big spenders and others think it's not that worthwhile. In my opinion, we should not
spendthrift
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spend thrift
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. Arguments for agreement and a counterargument are explained below in detail
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 the conclusion.
Firstly
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, a Wedding is the biggest
event
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 that happens in anyone's life , where relatives and friends are invited to bless the couple and grace the occasion. Since it is a one-time party some spend an exorbitant amount and create envy among the guest.
This
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 creates a bad trendsetting in society and pushes others as well to do so.
In addition
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 , these behaviours when not planned properly will make the respective
person
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 bankrupt in future.
As a
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result
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 some might be pushed to take loans from the bank for all their fundamentals like children's education ,and medical emergencies, I know a
person
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 who went to
this
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 level.
Secondly
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, There are many food wastages in these marriages which can be avoided.
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, I know a
person
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 who tied the knot recently and he invited 1000 people to his reception on a weekday but many did not turn up since it was a busy day. So there was a huge food left out and they dumped it into the garbage.
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 , another
person
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 had a very simple nuptial
event
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 with fewer invitees , was well organized and there were no leftovers.
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, I am not telling them to be stingy but to spend wisely without taking a toll on their bank balances.
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