After being punished, many criminals continue to commit crimes. Why do some people commit crimes even after having been punished? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

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Although
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the punishment was created to stop crime, many criminals continue to
make
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new crimes after their first imprisonment. In that essay, I will explain why it is happening and what should be done to solve
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problem. The prison was created to change the community in order to not repeat their actions again. Actually, I think it does not work because the prison just keeps people in a cage without any moral, or psychological help.
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, the person
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among similar
offenders
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like him or worse. They make their own hierarchy where strong people often use weak people.
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after being punished,
offenders
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can not get a job because they committed a crime.
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, the offender who is abused by others and does not have money becomes very angry and grumpy, leading to new criminals. In my opinion, a possible solution to
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problem would be to change the prison system.
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, we need to develop judicial decisions and create
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conditions in prisons that would contribute to improving the personality of criminals and help them reform.
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,
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will improve the situation in the jail and the crowd will become less callous and meaner with each other.
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, a good way will be to find jobs for
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,
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as telephone operators, sweepers, and other easy jobs. It is necessary to distribute the job
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their speciality or if they have no experience at all,
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some kind of construction work so that they get some money to find housing for themselves. In conclusion, if the type of punishment
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the same, nothing will change and the number of crimes will continue to grow.
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, if the government will take care of the system and help the
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find work,
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in the future the number of crimes will be significantly reduced.
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Make sure to fully address the prompt by discussing the reasons for repeated criminal behavior and proposing specific measures to tackle the problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • recidivism
  • underlying issues
  • support systems
  • criminal networks
  • peer pressure
  • barriers
  • psychological assessment
  • addiction treatment
  • economic factors
  • sentencing
  • data analysis
  • community-based programs
  • restorative justice
  • vocational training
  • social inequalities
  • preventive measures
  • post-release
  • crime cycle
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