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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at the school. To what extend do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#educationalists #exchange #visits #benefit #teenagers #school
Many tutors think that studying abroad will benefit adolescence. It will help the
student
 to know
outside
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country
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culture
, language , food and so on which will outweigh the drawbacks. Numerous
student
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students
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 will get lots of knowledge by studying
in
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outside school or college.
To begin
 with,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 can meet up with various
type
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 of other
country
 students and can measure their intelligence by competing with them. They can
also
 know about their
culture
 and cities.
For example
 , if the
student
admit
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 themselves
in
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Australia's
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Australia
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school
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schools
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 or
college
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colleges
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,they can learn Australian
culture
as well as
 other
country'
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countries'
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 s
student
culture
 ,moral value and
their
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livelihood.
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to
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, by
traveling
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travelling
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another
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to another
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country
 they can know prominent places which will help their study side.
However
,
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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 who
visit
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visits
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 well education system
country
 can bring
good will
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for
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to
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 their native
country
 .
Besides
, they can change their
country
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country's
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 bad education system which not only educational development for that
country
 but
also
 economical development.
Nevertheless
, it has some drawbacks
such
 as the
student
feel
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 lonely without their family. Sometimes they can forget their own
country
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country's
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 rules and regulations. Whatever , still my opinion is that
student
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students
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 will
benefitted
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 more than the disadvantages. In conclusion , most
of
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the
tutor
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tutors
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 prefer to send the
student
for
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to
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 study or
traveling
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travel
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 in school life because it can enrich their knowledge
on
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of
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 various think and can be good for their own
country
 . So my point of view is that it has advantages more than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educationalists
  • international exchange visits
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • school
  • exposes
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • enhances
  • language skills
  • promotes
  • independence
  • self-confidence
  • builds
  • lifelong friendships
  • provides
  • unique learning experiences
  • expensive
  • homesickness
  • emotional distress
  • careful planning
  • logistical arrangements
  • disrupt
  • academic progress
  • safety
  • security risks
  • cultural appropriation
  • misunderstandings
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