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some young people say that their mobile phone are the most important think they own. Do you think that the use of mobile phones is good. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

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The mobile
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 is one of the most important inventions of
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 digital era. Smartphones are popular among all age groups, as it is necessary to communicate with
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 and technology.
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, mobile phones are important, but many
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 don't prefer them because of the assumption made by
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 that phones cause distraction and have negative effects on the younger population.
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smartphone has their own advantages and disadvantages.
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, mobile phones allow their users to connect to the internet and enable communication with others by using a
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 or a computer, it allows users to download and use apps for productivity, entertainment, and content creation. but on the other ,hand
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 misuse
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 technology to commit crimes and promote unhealthy habits like game addiction and etc. In my ,opinion the benefits of owning a smartphone outweigh the disadvantages it has.
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 are addicted to playing mobile games and using social media for a long period which
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 results in the depreciation of mental and physical health. but there are other examples where a mobile
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 is used by artists, content creators and others to produce content for others to enjoy. In a nutshell, a mobile
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 is a great gift that humankind has got, and it is our responsibility to avoid using it for wrong and rather find more ways to use it for our betterment and development of ourselves.
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