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Major cities have become too big and overcrowded. Why is this the case? What are some possible solutions to this?

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In many modern countries, the ever-expanding
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 region and overcrowded living environment have aroused much public concern.
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 essay attempts to look into the possible reasons and provide some feasible solutions. On the one hand, supporters of living in enormous
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 believed that the benefits from them cannot be ignored.
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 with, since most of these problems have been created suddenly they are expensive without attention to increasing
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 as medical or residential
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this
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 is to say the population of
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 focus to special points of
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whereas
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 they can give out
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 to near times
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 to her is densely populated land that
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 cannot find appropriate accommodation with the nice price
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 when the when these issues have not solved the
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 more and more our crowded
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 is her hurts
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 living and effectively and aspects of their of
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 Life.
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 to learning a possible solution regarding increasing population and migration to large
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, it
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 has to be that the Kia step in
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 administration to educate the community to make
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 more and more about the mother
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 and living
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 of
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as a result
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 single
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 can find better job and accommodation to another
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 and the
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 make it better
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 for other town have other
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 avoid that immigrate to capital or densely populated towns for him in stands
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 can build new
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 in the near of major
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 to tackle evaluated gravy shoe like full population
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 it's highly important to
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 make your voice decision because they can influence many lives. In conclusion, the reasons why a
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 has become more crowded and expanding are multiple, and it is crucial for the
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 to take positive actions to address it.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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