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Nowadays many students choose to study abroad at university level. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

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These days, it is popular
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students
 to study at international universities and there are positive and negative sides. Personally, I believe that it is useful for first graduates,
however
, it should not go on for decades. In
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this
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To begin
 with, there are several benefits of studying abroad.
Firstly
,
students
, who study abroad, will learn new
culture
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cultures
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, traditions and
language
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languages
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. People will have different views
to
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 the world.
For instance
, in Hong Kong universities undergraduates know English, Chinese languages and
Chinese’s
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 culture.
Secondly
, it requires being responsible to live in other countries, because it is not your motherland and you have to survive there.
Finally
,
students
 have a lot of opportunities overseas.
For example
, to work in experienced companies, to become acquainted with celebrities.
However
, in some cases, studying abroad has drawbacks.
On the other hand
, attending a university course overseas has difficulties. One of them is
difficulty
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 to learn new languages.
For example
, German universities require learning German for level B2 and it is hard for some countries. Another disadvantage is concern about forgetting
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 culture and traditions. It means that
students
, who are attending abroad, can lose sight of their country and outreach
others
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 values.
Furthermore
, living away from family and
friend
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friends
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 may be
daunting
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 experience and some
students
 might start to feel alone and stressed. In conclusion, attending overseas has benefits and drawbacks.
However
, in my mind, I believe that
benefits
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 outweigh than drawbacks and more and more people should experience living away from
motherland
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their motherland
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.
Submitted by Deadline 8th April IELTS on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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