the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development

the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development

the maps show Southside, a shopping mall, as it is now and plans for its development
The two maps represent the shopping
mall
, Southside, in its current form and how it will look in the future.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that green spaces
such
as parks and golf courses will disappear for more
stores
and for a bigger territory for car parks. Nowadays, the Southside shopping
centre
consists of only a supermarket, a department store, cinemas, a noodle shop and a café with a children’s play area and toilet facilities.
Furthermore
, to the East of the
Centre
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,Centre
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there is a park and a golf course
while
to the south there is a fitness
centre
and a car park.
According to
the planned development of the
mall
, only the supermarket, toilet and entrance will remain
on
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in
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the same place and with the same
size
.
Thus
, it will be added
a
Correct article usage
the
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new entrance in the department store will be twice bigger
than
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as
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at present.
Moreover
, new fashion
stores
, a gift shop, two shoe
stores
, a cosmetics store and a beauty salon will be added to the future
mall
.
Subsequently
, for its
size
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,size
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it will be added
also
an info
centre
that will help you to understand the placement of the
stores
.
Also
, the car park
size
will be as big as the
mall
size
.
Finally
, the future
mall
will be bigger, with a lot of new
stores
and innovations, but a very bad feature is that the green area will be excluded and it is very bad for our environment.
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