The internet has changed the way we communicate. Much communication today happens through social media. Some people support this and think it is a positive development. Others believe that social media have negative effects. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In the past
decade
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we witnessed a significant
change
in how our society communicates. The rise of the internet followed by social
media
undeniably changed our world. Today experts and non-experts alike hold different views regarding the possible impact of
this
change
on the human population of the globe. Some are glad about
this
development,
while
others are saying we must consider the negative impact. Supports of
this
development say that it became easier to communicate at
a far distances
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,
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and
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people
become more interconnected. It is easier
for instance
to make friends in faraway countries and bring
people
together. Academics and experts who support
this
social-
media
rise,
also
mention that today, we have more access to new information sources like
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videos and social
media
channels that in turn increase our general knowledge and provide fertile ground to share ideas and notions.Those supporting claims make
people
accept
this
change
as a welcomed
change
for the better. On the other side of the spectrum, stand
people
who say that
this
development happened too fast without giving it too much thought. In just one generation the world radically changed. For ,example experts claim that kids today have fewer face-to-face interactions with other children and that
this
lack of interaction will harm them. It is
also
well known that social
media
is a hard place to regulate and might promote bad behaviour and support ideas which contradict basic values. Videos of
people
humiliating or offending other humans are easy to be found on social
media
. Those cases make
people
avoid social
media
or just keep their time spent there to the minimum.
Eventually
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to conclude
this
subject, in my
opinion
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we need to find the balance between both views
,
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since both of them have the right ideas behind them. Social
media
is a true blessing in some way, but we
also
must enforce better regulations, and make sure social
media
won't make
people
avoid physical contact.
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  • instant communication
  • global connectivity
  • networking opportunities
  • data privacy
  • data breaches
  • mental health issues
  • excessive use
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • feelings of loneliness
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • public misinformation
  • societal harm
  • shared interests
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