The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph above illustrates the proportion of
people
in the UK,
that is
over 4 years old, who watched television and listened to the
radio
daily in 1992 during the course of 2 months, October to December.
Overall
, when the percentage of
people
that watched
televisions
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rose the number of
people
that listened to the
radio
declined. The only time when the number of
people
that used televisions and
radio
are equal was around 1pm. We can see on the graph that
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at
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the beginning of the day, at 6am, nobody used television but about 17%
the
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of the
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UK population listened to the
radio
.There was a massive difference, about 11%, at about 9am when
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the percentage
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of
people
reached its highest for
radio
, approximately 28%
whereas
the number of
people
that were watching television was slowly dropping down from 17% at the same time. At about 8pm, the proportion of
people
who were watching
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, radio with synonyms.
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