Nowadays more and more people are choosing to do online shopping. What are the advanatages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays a lot of people are preferring to do online shopping. There are a number of advantages and disadvantages of
this
development. On the one hand , doing online shopping has a lot of advantages.
For
example
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it is
too
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good way to save
our
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time , I mean we do not
to
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need to go
bazar
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bazaar
or
walking
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in
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the bazar
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bazar
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bazaar
or shopping
centers
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to find what we want.
Second
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advantage is that
in
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online shopping has
range
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of stylish
clothes
or popular brands’ products .
For
example
, the
clothes
on
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online stores are better than the
clothes
sell in
bazar
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bazaar
.
Finally
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on
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in
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online
magazines
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you can find fashionable
clothes
. When brands make
new
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type
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of
clothes
the
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first they sell
this
on
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online. On websites or in social
medias
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media
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after
this
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they sent to stores. On the one hand ,
do
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online shopping can make some problems that when you have got on it can not suit you.
For
example
:
problem
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with
color
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does not match you and sometimes when you get
clothes
it can not
be
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similar
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picture you saw
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social media. Another primary disadvantage
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is
size
.
Usually
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people choose
wrong
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size
and
this
is not fit them .
For
example
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when you buy something from another country
size
can change and if you chose another
size
when you get it , it can be bigger or smaller for you .
Finally
, it is delivery .
This
is too very
commonly
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problem because
during
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the way some
clothes
can lose and you can do nothing.
To conclude
, both sides have advantages and disadvantages but
nevertheless
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people are
continuing
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do online shopping .
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