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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains the world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far out-weight the disadvantages.

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Nuclear
technology
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 has played a significant role in modern society, both in military and civilian fields.
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 some people argue that its advantages,
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 as maintaining global peace and producing clean
energy
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, outweigh its drawbacks, I largely agree with
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 view despite the risks involved. One major benefit of nuclear
technology
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 is its contribution to international security. The existence of nuclear weapons acts as a deterrent, discouraging countries from engaging in large-scale wars. Since the devastating events of the Second World War, nuclear-armed nations have generally avoided direct military conflict because of the potentially catastrophic consequences.
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, nuclear weapons can be seen as an important factor in maintaining global stability. Another advantage is the generation of nuclear
energy
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. Compared with fossil fuels, nuclear power produces a vast amount of electricity
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 emitting very low levels of greenhouse gases.
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 makes it a cleaner alternative for meeting the growing
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 demands of modern societies.
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, nuclear power plants can operate continuously and provide a reliable source of
energy
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 at a relatively low cost over the long term.
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, nuclear
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also
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 carries serious disadvantages. Nuclear accidents,
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 as those at
Chernobyl
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Chornobyl
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 and Fukushima, demonstrate the potentially devastating environmental and human consequences of failures in nuclear facilities.
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, radioactive waste remains hazardous for thousands of years and poses significant challenges for safe disposal. The spread of nuclear weapons
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 increases the risk that they may fall into the hands of irresponsible governments or extremist groups. In conclusion,
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 nuclear
technology
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 presents considerable risks, I believe that its benefits outweigh its disadvantages. When managed responsibly and under strict international regulations, it can contribute to both global security and sustainable
energy
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 production. تقييم هذا النموذج: Band 8.0–8.5

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For task response: your answer is clear, but you can add one more direct idea on why the bad side is still under control.
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coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: your ideas move in a clear order, but you can use a few more linking words like 'on the one hand' and 'as a result' with more care.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: in one body part, you can explain the link between the main idea and the example a bit more.
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For task response: you answer all parts of the task and give a clear opinion from start to end.
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For task response: your examples about war and power help support your main ideas.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the essay has a clear intro, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea, so the essay is easy to follow.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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