The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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of shop closures and openings in a country from 2011 to 2018. From the figure, it is clear to see that the
number
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of shop closures and openings fluctuates a lot up and down.
In contrast
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, there was a
declining
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resulting in
that
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the
number
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in 2018 is all lower than
before
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in 2011. The
number
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of shops that closed in 2011 was about 6400 and it came reached a peak of over 70% .And it had a critical decline to its lowest in 2015, about only 600.Between 2015 and 2016 ,there is a rebound to approximately 5100
,
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and remained stable at around five thousand in the next two years. Turning to the
number
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of shop openings, it is noticeable that had a big decline in 2011,
which
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from 8500 to 3900 and back to 6100 from 2012 to 2014.In the next 4 years, it dramatically dropped from 6100 new shops in 2014 to 3000 new shops in 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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