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Countries population is increasing so people believe that we should build new homes in existing cities Instead of waiting new cities in countryside. What do you think about that give me a example Or your own experience ?

#countries #population #people #homes #cities #countryside
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It is a fact that
people
moving
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move
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 from rural
areas
 to urban
areas
 for a better standard of life. Some
people
 believe that
city
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the city
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 can accommodate many
people
 so
constructions
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the constructions
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 of new homes are advisable
whereas
 others opine that rural
areas
 are more suitable for new construction.
This
 essay intended to analyze both perspectives,I,
however
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,however
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believes
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believe
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 that
cities
 are more suitable for building new homes.
To begin
 with,
construction
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the construction
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 of
new
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the new
a new
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 building in
cities
 promote more advantages.
Firstly
, urban communities are available with materials, technology and
skillful
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skilful
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 human power which is more helpful for
the
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apply
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employers to build new homes.
Secondly
 through proper transportation manufacturers can easily commute
processd
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processed
process
 raw materials in new sites.
In addition
 , it will save money and time for these
process
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processes
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.
Thirdly
, nowadays employees prefer to work
urban
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in urban
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areas
 because of public health facilities and
availability
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the availability
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 of goods and services.
For example
,
recent
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a recent
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 human development index report
point
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points
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 out that workers like to migrate
urban
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to urban
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 centres because of
its
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their
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 civic support and facilities.
On the other hand
, building new towns in the countryside generate more positive outcomes. Nowadays majority of the Megacities are congested with buildings.
Therefore
 it is not possible to build new buildings because of
lack
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the lack
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 of land availability.
In addition
, it will stimulate environmental pollution and
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the
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destruction of habitat. To illustrate
this
 Mega
cities
 like New Delhi and Beijing
now
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are now
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 faced with serious migration problems. So their local government reduced
new
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the new
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 construction of
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the home
a home
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home
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homes
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. In conclusion,
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apply
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according to
 ,
me
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apply
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cities
 are already developed in many terms.
Therefore
, government and
people
 can protect the habitat of
countryside
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the countryside
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.
In addition
, development is essential but we need to take care of our surroundings and make sure that it will
useful
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use
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 for
the
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apply
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future generation.
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