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People who do not use social media networks will always fall behind in career development opportunities.’ To what extent do you feel that this is an accurate and important prediction?

Social
media
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 plays an increasingly pivotal role in our lives, and the ability to
use
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 these systems is certainly an advantage both socially and professionally.
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, it seems rather excessive to say that ignorance of these matters will ‘always’ restrict people’s careers, and I will explain why.
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,
career
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 progression relies on a whole range of factors, not only on the
use
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 of social
media
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. For example, a professional person will have a range of qualifications, ranging from academic exams to vocational certificates and membership in professional bodies. We see
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 the way that successful doctors take increasingly specialised qualifications and join specific institutes to develop their skills. Here, social
media
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 may be a communication tool, but is surely not the driving force behind success.
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,
career
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 development relies greatly on interpersonal skills
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 as presentation methods, persuasiveness and negotiation, all of which are used in face-to-face situations rather than remotely.
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, we should remember the dangers of social
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 and the risk of actually hindering one’s
career
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,
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 by accidentally distributing awkward photos or comments which can be an embarrassment personally and professionally. Indeed, many professionals in fact minimise
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the
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 of these
media
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 because of
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 risk. Admittedly, it is true that social
media
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 presents great opportunities for making contacts and networking,
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 by building a following or
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updates on a particular topic.
However
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,
this
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 tends to happen when a person is already qualified and respected in their field, rather than being a cause of success. In conclusion, it appears that skilful
use
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 of these
media
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 can play a useful role in
career
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 progression, despite the possible risks.
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, the fundamental qualifications and personal skills which drive a
career
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 will ensure that those who are not enthusiastic users will still progress as they wish.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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