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You were asked to write about your favourite anime. So naruto came to sasuke and kissed sakura in front of him. discuss your opinion.

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Tourism I’d like to tell
about
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you about
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such
 kind of tourism
is
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as
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 rafting on the river. I did it with my friends in the past. We
was
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were
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 young and it was
very
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a very
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 gorgeous time. We drive by car to the
start
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starting
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 point and there
building
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build
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 a raft. When everything is done, we put the raft on
a
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the
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 water and begin our journey. Our trip continues
a
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for a
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few days. We are rafting
while
 the sun is shining, but in the evening we stop for the night. We
building
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built
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 the tents, cocking a diner and after
all
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,all
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 we have a very gorgeous time
to rest
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resting
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 and
relax
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relaxing
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. It’s so super to seating near the fire,
listening
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tolistening
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 the guitar and it’s a
stories
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story
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 time, of course. The air
so
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is so
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 clear and we can see so many stars in the sky, but we can’t see in the city. We are alone and so wonderful
nature
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in nature
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 around us. When we return to the city, we are tired but very happy. I really like it. And perhaps we will repeat it someday.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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