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Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

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It is said that the distribution of
food
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 around the world is not equal. Some argue that nations had better produce their own
food
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 rather than import that. I believe
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 it can be challenging to produce every kind of
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 within the boundaries, I completely agree with
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 idea and I believe it could be very beneficial. When
countries
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 produce their own
food
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, they become politically independent and they can stand on their own foot. Iraq,
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, is a
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 of nearly 30 million and almost all of its
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 is imported from Iran and Turkey.
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, it has made Iraq very dependent on these two
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 since it has to pay a big amount of its revenue to these
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;
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, in case of any political conflict with these two neighbouring
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; Iraq would be politically in a weaker position ,owing to the fact that they are
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 supplier.
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, for many ,
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 it is economically beneficial to become self-sufficient in
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 production. In many ,cases money which would be spent on supplying
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 from other nations
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 could have been invested in other infrastructures
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 as education and industry.
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, consider a
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 which tries to mostly live on
food
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 which is produced locally.
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 it helps them to save more money and make use of it to invest in their own
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 as developing agricultural infrastructure.
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, some believe it is impossible to become independent in
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 production, I believe thanks to different technologies
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 as greenhouses it is now possible to produce any
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 in any place and ecosystem. In conclusion, importing
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 as little as possible is very welcoming for any
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 and it would result in more financial and political independence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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