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Entry to art galleries and museums should be free.Do you agree or disagree?

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Art
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galleries
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 and
museums
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 are more and more popular all over the world. Some people may think that the entrance
fee
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 to
art
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galleries
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 and
museums
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 should be free,
while
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 I think that some of us should still pay the entry ticket in order to preserve these places. On one hand, people think that
art
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galleries
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 and
museums
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 are related to one
country
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's culture, heritage and history. The public is able to learn more about their
country
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 from visiting these places, and
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 increase their sense of belonging to the community and
country
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.
Therefore
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, the
government
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 should pay for the entrance
fee
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 and allow citizens with different social backgrounds and statuses including the grassroots are able to have a chance to visit them.
On the other hand
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, as
art
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galleries
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 and
museums
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 represent one
country
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's culture, they could become tourists' talking points and attraction sites, and
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 they could serve as important financial support to the
government
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. The
government
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 has many other issues to deal with,
such
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 as medical issues, educational issues and security problems,which all need a high financial budget, in order to maintain the
country
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 running smoothly.Compared with the above issue which are the basic needs of humans,
Art
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 is luxury. As a large percentage of the
government
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 budget is allocated to other aspects, the
government
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 may not handle the high maintenance
fee
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 of the
museums
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 and
galleries
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 without any financial support from the tourists, in turn, more and more
art
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galleries
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 and
museums
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 would be demolished in long term. In conclusion,
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art
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galleries
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 and
museums
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 represent the
country
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's culture and history and all the citizens should have the right to visit them, I still disagree that entry to
art
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galleries
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 and
museums
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 should be free for all people, indeed, I think all least tourists should pay for the entrance
fee
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 in order to support the high maintenance
fee
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 of these attraction sites.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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