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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of put behind the bars To what extend do you agree?

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A group of people strongly believe that selective offenders should be engaged in unpaid
community
 service
instead
 of being captive in jail. I firmly agree with
this
 idea because being active in social
works
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work
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will help
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criminals
 to adjust
with
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the
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society
afterward
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 of
punishment
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 period.
Also
, it will bring economic benefits
for
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 the government.
Firstly
, most
criminals
specially
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the
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teenagers feel
ditached
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detached
 from
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society when they return from prison. If minor offenders can be involved in
community
 work, it will help them to feel the
intigral
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integral
 part of the
socity
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society
.
Also
, general people are prone to avoid
criminals
. Considering
this
 , if
criminals
 can perform some volunteer
works
 for
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society, it will bring some positive change
on
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community
peoples’
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 perspective
for
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of
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the
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criminals
.
For example
, India has recently released a rule for
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minors
criminals
 to take part in different social activities and it has significantly impacted
on
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their
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 social communication between
criminals
 and the general people.
Secondly
,
government
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 has to pay a large amount of money for different
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community
works
. If
criminals
 can be involved in those activities without pay, a huge amount of money can be saved.
Moreover
,
this
 fund can be utilized
in
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other purpose
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, or it can be stored as
reseve
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reserve
receive
 money for
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future need. For an instance, Sweden engaged all of their minor
criminals
 in a road construction
last
 year, which helped to save 1 million dollars.
To sum up
, particular offenders ought to be involved in different social
works
, which will undoubtedly bring some profoundly constructive impacts on both
socity
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society
 and the
criminals
.
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