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some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of High School programs( for example working for charity improving the neighborhood for teaching sports to younger children) To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #community #services #part #school #programs #charity #neighborhood #sports #children
Many
people
 think that extracurricular activities
such
 as voluntary work and other kinds of employment for charity should be involved at
school
, especially in High
School
,
although
 others tend to not agree with it. In my point of view,
such
 activities as
this
 should be at
school
 and I will write several arguments to prove my opinion. First of all, voluntary work helps students to recognise the value of kindness and empathise with other
people
. It means that cooperation with
people
 develops the ethical features of teenagers so that they will learn how to be a part of society and know moral principles.
For example
, In Japan since
the
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Middle
School
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 all students get involved to clean in the classroom and they figure out the importance of discipline and respect
the
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 occupation of all
people
 because they understand how it will be hard.
On the other hand
,
people
 who
were
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doing community
services
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in
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school
 years could be more
successfull
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successful
 in their future life.
In other words
, adolescents had already been taught by older
people
 when they had been in voluntary service and they listened to different stories and advice which might be useful.
Then
, individuals will use it and learn to be more hard-working and patient.
For instance
, in Kazakhstan old
people
 love to give advice from their personal experience which they had recognised during their whole life and it helps to young generation to avoid mistakes and to be good members of the community. In conclusion, I think there are only many benefits from extracurricular voluntary employment
such
 as understanding loyalty, kindness and being social which can be useful in the future for adolescents.
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