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Band 4

You have a friend who has always liked the car you currently drive. Now you have decided to sell the car. You think your friend might be interested in buying it. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, say why you want to sell your car describe the condition of the car invite the friend to come and see the car himself/herself someday Write at least 150 words.

#friend #car #drive #condition
Dear Jay, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that,
finally
, I have decided to sell my
car
 and because you have always liked my
car
, I am giving you a first chance to see my
car
 and if you
will
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like it,
then
 would be happy to sell it to you. I have been driving
this
car
 for the
last
 five years and because of
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the tidness
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tidness
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tiredness
tidiness
from
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of
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 the same
car
, I have
took
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taken
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a
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the
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 decision to buy
new
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a new
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 one.
This
 vehicle is driven by me only which has helped me maintain the
car
 in good condition
also
, all of its
interiour
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interior
 or outer
spar-parts
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spar parts
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 are in
good
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a good
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 position with no
scretch
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scratch
 on
it
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them
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. I warmly
welcoming
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welcome
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 you to visit
at
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apply
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my house and take the
drive
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driving
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 test of the
car
 which will assist you to take the
further
 step. Looking forward to hearing from you. Regards, Ankit
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coherence cohesion
Try to use paragraphs to separate different points or ideas, which can improve readability and coherence.
task achievement
Pay attention to spelling and grammar to ensure a more polished piece of writing. For example, 'tidness' should be 'tiredness' and 'spar-parts' should be 'spare parts'.
task achievement
The letter clearly addresses the purpose of the task by explaining why you want to sell the car and inviting the friend to see it.
task achievement
You have used a polite and friendly tone, which is suitable for writing to a friend.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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