The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main fitures and make comparisons where relevant
the given maps illustrate the changes that have been made in a secondary
school
in 3 different years, 1950, 1980 and 2010. In brief,
it is clear that
houses in the first year have been replaced for other purposes and one thing that somehow has remained unchanged is the playground which exists in all three years. In 1950 there are houses
in
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the left upper side of the
school
and
in
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the right upper
side
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there is the
school
itself. In the next year
however
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the houses are replaced completely with a science block and a car park
while
the
school
in
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the right is now the
schools
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main building. In 2010, the car park
has
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expanded to a larger capacity and
has
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made the sports field smaller compared to what it was in 1980 but the science block and
school
main building
haveremained
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have remained
unchanged over the course of 30 years.
Play ground
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has stayed in the same spot but it has gotten smaller considering that some part of what was a
play ground
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playground
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in 1950 and 1980
has
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became
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a field in 2010.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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