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Using computer every day can have more negatives than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 modern era, the world is developing excessively,
therefore
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 peoples tend to use
computers
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 for their day-to-day work and negative effects more than positives. I
also
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 agree with that. Foremostly with young generations, some younger
children
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 are addicted to
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 habit, mostly computer games and social media.
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 a very excessive problem for their parents. But some younger
children
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 are tended to use
computers
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 usefully and effectively. In
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 essay, I will discuss both matters.
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, the younger
children
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 are very bored going outside the playground to play some team games with others,
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 they always tried to stay at home and find something to do easily. The computer is the easiest and quick way to spend their
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, that's why they excessively tend to spend their
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 with
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.
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this
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 behaviour downgraded their education, and reading books.,
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 some
children
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 are addicted to watching porn films as well,
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 that unethical behaviour, violet their minds and pollutes society.
Secondly
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, some
children
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 do their work with
computers
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,in a good way and they absorb some knowledge and a new lot of knowledge through the
computers
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,
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 because a computer is
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 easiest and better instrument to reach the world and education. In a nutshell, we can find good and bad to use
computers
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 for younger
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, but the parents can manage
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 issue, they should thoroughly follow through with the
children
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 and their education, monitor
children
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's behaviours, make some
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 barriers for
children
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 to spent
time
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 with
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,
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 some several solutions to overcome
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 problem.
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, in my opinion,I believe, parents should participate in
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 matter.
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