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all education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

#education #healthcare #government #idea
It has been argued by many individuals that medical and health facilities ought to
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 via the regime
as well as
 free of cost for everybody. I partially agree with
this
 given statement and
this
 essay shall shed light upon my perspective in subsequent paragraphs
along with
 a reasoned conclusion.
Firstly
, the fundamental cause behind my agreement is that it is
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 of everyone. In some
part
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 of the
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 statutory bodies give education and healthcare amenities to only destitute people so, it is
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discrimination
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 citizens of
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human beings
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 they are rich or poor.
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, a survey conducted by Harward University revealed that in India the Congress party only give cash to those humans who have no capital for treatment or their academic field, but
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 of the land are protesting against
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 types of facilities free.  Paradoxically, the prominent ground behind my disagreement is that if higher authorities give free
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 and medicines, the population do not do work because they would already know the law authorities pay treatment fees and school. With
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 they might become tension free and
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bad company.
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they
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 not tension about their needs because it is
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fulfilled
 by the council.
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 thing to give teaching and healthcentre to people, it spread the differentiation between wealthy and needy people.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • universal access
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