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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
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The graph illustrates the average daily
temperature
 of
Brisbane
 and
Canberra
.
Overall
 the minimum
temperature
 in
Canberra
 was observed in June and July
while
 the maximum
temperature
 was in December January and
February
. A similar trend was observed in Brisban To compare the least
temperature
 recorded is in June which is below 1 degree in
Brisbane
however
Canberra
's lowest
temperature
 is approximately 10 degrees in July. The two cities have drastic differences in their minimum and maximum
temperature
. The maximum
temperature
 recorded in
Brisbane
 is 30 degrees in
February
while
 the maximum
temperature
 in
Canberra
 is above 25 degrees which
are
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is
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 in January and
February
. Looking into
bar
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 chart
that
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apply
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potrays
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portrays
average
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an average
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 number of
days
 with
rainfall
 in two cities
of
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in
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 Australia.
Brisbane
 seems to have a high amount of
rainfall
 around the year which is 14
days
,
while
Canberra
 seems to record fewer number
days
 with an approximation of 10
days
. The maximum
rainfall
that is
 recorded in
Brisbane
 is in
February
 and March
while
 the maximum rain recorded in
Canberra
 is in June, July and August which apparently are the months that recorded the least
rainfall
 in
Brisbane
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, brisbane, canberra, february, days, rainfall with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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