You live in a small university towm.last week.Youdrove to a big city about 2 hours away to buy a new laptop at a good price.I worked on the laptop all week and finished writing a long assignment that is due shortly.however,this week,the laptop doesn't even switch on.Write to the store.In my my letter: °tell the store where you live& what you live happened °explain the problem °state what action you would like the store to help
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Dear Customer Service Manager,
I am writing to you regarding a
laptop
I purchased from your store in Tashkent last
week. I live in the small university town of Muborak and traveled
to your store on JULY 21 specifically to take advantage of the excellent price Change the spelling
travelled
on
a new Change preposition
of
laptop
.
I have been using the laptop
every day since my purchase and completed a significant assignment due shortly. However
, I was dismayed to discover that the laptop
will not power on this
week. I have tried all troubleshooting steps, such
as checking the power cord and battery, but the issue persists.
As the laptop
was purchased only last
week, I believe it is likely a manufacturing defect and would appreciate your assistance in resolving this
issue. I would like to request a replacement laptop
or a full refund for the faulty device. I am available to return the laptop
to your store at a time convenient for you.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely, salimboy
Correct your spelling
slim boy
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task achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter for small grammatical and punctuation errors to enhance clarity. For instance, minor corrections like 'Tashkent last week' should be separated with a comma: 'Tashkent, last week.'
coherence cohesion
While your letter is well-organized, adding a brief introductory sentence stating the purpose of your letter right after the greeting can provide immediate context to the reader.
task achievement
The letter effectively conveys the main issue, the steps you've taken to troubleshoot, and what actions you expect in response. This demonstrates clear task achievement.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured and divided into clear paragraphs, which helps in maintaining coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Effective use of formal tone, which is appropriate for a letter to customer service.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite