many people believe that social media networking sites( such as face book have has huge negetive impact on both individual and society.

Over the
last
few decades,social media became a prominent tool in society.It is accepted
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some about social media
for instance
facebook
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has a detrimental effect on both individuals and communities.
However
, from my point of
view
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such
a platform has several benefits for an individual especially friendship and commercial aspects,and many disadvantageous consequences in community
life
. With regard to personal
life
,the impact of online
such
as
facebook
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has incredible benefits.There is
a
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obvious example of
this
is making friends,who could believe that sitting in front of a computer with the help of growing technology & communication at home ,
people
can connect and share their feelings and develop understanding between themself
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Playing games which help to break the person's loneliness and bring so much fun to
life
is only possible on
this
platform.
Furthermore
, from a commercial point of ,view there is a chance to buy and sell the products online, going to an
e-market place
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e-marketplace
.Without paying
heavy
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transport to
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people
can get their needy things
at
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their doorstep.
On the other hand
,social media has
a
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disadvantagous
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disadvantageous
effects
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on social
life
.A clear example is
this
.
People
are
more close
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to
world
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community rather than their local agency.
Instead
of buying a box of an apple from the local market ,
people
order
it
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online.The effort and energy of local farmers get paradise when the boxes of apples on their farm go to waste.There
are
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no encouragement and support
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the individuals face to face relationships.As a
,
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consequence there are no bindings among
people
.
In addition
to that many families got
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due the Facebook. Many relations
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come to an end. Cheating and fraud are not allowed in the family.
Although
they are physically at home , as many
people
are very much edited & engaged
themself
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in
this
platform,they have no time to spend enough time with family & children, as a
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result destruction at the family level. In conclusion,social networking brought
incrediable
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incredible
benefits for an individual by bringing
the
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people
at
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one place from the world ,but there
are
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advert
impact
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on
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social
life
.
People
should use
the
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technology in
a
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right way and get
the
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possitive
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positive
result
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both
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individual
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and
collective
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life
.
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