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It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages?

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Venturing out into the unknown and taking
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 are, to some extent, essential to almost everyone both professionally and personally. Some may argue that risk-taking is unnecessary and may lead to more disadvantages than advantages, but
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 essay will seek to argue that its pros outweigh its cons. On the
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 hand, it is irrefutable that taking
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 is risky, and is accompanied by some potentially unavoidable drawbacks. The biggest and most profound disadvantage that
people
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 fear when taking
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 is the wanted results do not show up.
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,
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 fail to get what they expect. And failures usually lead
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 to experience negatively chaotic scenarios
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 as instability at work, chaotic financial lives, emotional breakdowns, or losing personal confidence. These may result in a surge of pressure and stress that
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 have to bear, and for those who have a low-stress endurance threshold,
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 a sudden increase is destructive, or even lethal.
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, these excuses are not sufficient to stop
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 from enjoying the benefits offered by being adventurous and taking
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. First of all, trying new things in
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 brings the necessary excitement which breaks the tedious repetition in lives, motivates and keeps
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 moving forward. Even though failures are
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 of the potential consequences, examples of
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 who succeed by taking
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 are uncountable.
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, Mark Zuckerberg, co-founder of a multi-billion technology company dropped out of university and followed his outlandish dream, and is now
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 of the youngest and richest
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 on the planet.
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, risk-taking will save us unnecessary regrets later in
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 for choosing to play safe, which makes our
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 and only
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 forgettable. In conclusion,
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 taking
risks
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 is important, fear of failure keeps
people
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 sticking to their ordinary patterns and leading risk-free
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.
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, considering the wonders that taking
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 can bring to our lives, I still contend that its advantages totally outweigh its disadvantages.
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