Some people think that the way to reduce people getting a lot of sugar is to raise the price of sugary products. Do you agree?
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over
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there
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human
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apply
people
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opinion
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is included
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human
reason
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many
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high weight.
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habitats
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the habitats
sugar
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of humans
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buy
sugar
and any products of sugar
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the
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reason
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think that cost is very superior and they can't afford
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itafford
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the company
company
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companies
people
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which
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the reason
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by natural
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are used
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people
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reason
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.
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of groups
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite