A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, •describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team •summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts •say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

in regard to giving my feedback about the notice posted in Time of India dated 28th January. Your idea about sponsoring the children's sports team for two years is fantastic. It will

also

help some poor kids to participate.

Additionally

, other kids will understand the benefits of outdoor games which will inspire them to join the same.

However

, concerts

also

have their own benefits. Our area mostly consists of the slum who never got a chance to visit concerts as they are costly for them. They will get to enjoy the show and make them happy for the moment. All age groups can enjoy the show, especially youngsters.

According to

me, both things are equally important for people.

In addition

to that, If you spend the budget on sponsoring one thing

then

all the age groups will not be benefited and

hence

, I am requesting to revise and you may sponsor the children's sports team for one year and pay for only one concert. I hope you will consider my suggestion. Yours faithfully, Kishan

Submitted by kishanpatel2550 on Sun Mar 05 2023

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0Word repetition
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0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

182 words

8.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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