The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for travelling in the us in 2009

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The pie

chart

and bar

chart

above

illustrate

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the problems for travellers and why

people

make trips to other places in the US in 2009.

Overall

, the most common issue for travellers is how much they pay for the trips which can affect their decision on why they take trips to other places. It seems like

people

are most willing to travel for work. The most popular reason for

people

to travel is business and it might be because of the effect of the troubles

people

have with travelling which are stated in the pie

chart

. Travelling for work takes up nearly half of the proportion, 43%, followed by personal with 19% and it shows a massive decline for leisure reasons like shopping, social/recreation, and visiting friends with 16%, 10% and 6% respectively. The reason that might be the reason that affects why

people

do not want to travel for holiday appears to be the amount of money that travelling requires. It takes about 36% of the pie

chart

and space for pedestrians seems to be the least of the worries and does not affect the traveller much as it only takes 6%.

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