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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities
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The graph displays the average monthly climate in
London
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, New
York
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, and
Sydney
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,
while
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 the table shows the mean annual
hours
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 of sunshine in these three cities. 
Overall
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,
London
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 and New
York
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 saw warmer temperatures during the year but with a decline
at the end
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,
whereas
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 the opposite is true for
Sydney
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. At the beginning of the period,
London
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 has a higher temperature than New
York
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, with 8 and approximately 5 respectively. As the heat in both cities increases, New
York
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's temperature reaches
London
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's in March, gradually increasing to a peak in July below 30 and around 23 before dropping in December, when New
York
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's warmth is lower than
London
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's.
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,
Sydney
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's condition fells from January to July, reaching its lowest point just above 15, and rising again towards the end of the term. The table reveals that New
York
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 receives the highest proportion of sunlight with 2535
hours
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, which is slightly higher than
Sydney
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's 2473
hours
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.
London
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 receives the least amount of sunshine, with only 1180
hours
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 in a year.
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